Thursday 25 July 2013

The Smile Of Ummukolsu...


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The chirps of Ummukolsu, always overwhelmed the heavy rains at Machigal and the Adhan from the mosque. Khadeeja, her mother would be running in and out of their mud-tiled roofed house several times, before her sweet baby went to school. Rahim said Ummukolsu smiled like her father, Riyaaz, as she waved her little hands to Khadeeja. According to the people of Machigal, she was an exact replica of Riyaaz, who had gone to Hajj, and never came back. 

By evening Khadeeja waited eagerly for Ummukolsu at the veranda for that shadow of Riyaaz’s smile, which always kept her hopeful thereafter...


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  1. You're a great writer! Very descriptive. Which is hard to squeeze into 100 words, I imagine!

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    1. Thank You Angie...It was rather difficult to squeeze the ideas in 100 words...somehow I made it...I am blessed...

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  2. Nice little story and the hope is still there.

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    1. Thank You Kalpana...actually the inspiration behind this, was the situation of women in the district of Malapuram in Kerala, where there are many families, who have been cheated by the men folk, and their cute little ones, still don't know who their fathers are...

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  3. Cute story
    nicely written :)

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  4. Nice story, a tad sad but ending in hope. Thanks for writing on my prompt.

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    1. Thank You Suzy...it was wonderful prompt indeed.

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  5. And then they say that smiles can only be about happiness, its about waiting and longing and perhaps hope..

    Richa

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  6. Hope is what keeps us going, Sreedev:) beautifully written and told in the simple and aesthetic style:)
    Vishal

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  7. Beautifully told. Sreedev. Hope keeps us going:)

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  8. your posts are mostly short and yet beautifully written that i am tempted to go through the rest of them.

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  9. really ice story...very well written :)

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  10. very nice. touching story. well written as usual...

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  11. Cool! A good story in few words!

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