Thursday, 25 July 2013

The Smile Of Ummukolsu...


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The chirps of Ummukolsu, always overwhelmed the heavy rains at Machigal and the Adhan from the mosque. Khadeeja, her mother would be running in and out of their mud-tiled roofed house several times, before her sweet baby went to school. Rahim said Ummukolsu smiled like her father, Riyaaz, as she waved her little hands to Khadeeja. According to the people of Machigal, she was an exact replica of Riyaaz, who had gone to Hajj, and never came back. 

By evening Khadeeja waited eagerly for Ummukolsu at the veranda for that shadow of Riyaaz’s smile, which always kept her hopeful thereafter...


(Linking this to The100 words challenge on "The Shadow Of Your Smile" & Ultimate Blog Challenge)


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36 comments :

  1. Angie Andriot6:40 pm, July 25, 2013

    You're a great writer! Very descriptive. Which is hard to squeeze into 100 words, I imagine!

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    1. Sreedev Soman10:10 am, July 26, 2013

      Thank You Angie...It was rather difficult to squeeze the ideas in 100 words...somehow I made it...I am blessed...

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  2. kalpana solsi10:43 pm, July 25, 2013

    Nice little story and the hope is still there.

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    1. Sreedev Soman10:12 am, July 26, 2013

      Thank You Kalpana...actually the inspiration behind this, was the situation of women in the district of Malapuram in Kerala, where there are many families, who have been cheated by the men folk, and their cute little ones, still don't know who their fathers are...

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  3. Pixie10:02 am, July 26, 2013

    Cute story
    nicely written :)

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  4. Suzy1:28 pm, July 26, 2013

    Nice story, a tad sad but ending in hope. Thanks for writing on my prompt.

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    1. Sreedev Soman10:38 pm, July 27, 2013

      Thank You Suzy...it was wonderful prompt indeed.

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  5. Richa Singh7:31 pm, July 26, 2013

    And then they say that smiles can only be about happiness, its about waiting and longing and perhaps hope..

    Richa

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  6. Anonymous2:37 pm, July 28, 2013

    Hope is what keeps us going, Sreedev:) beautifully written and told in the simple and aesthetic style:)
    Vishal

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  7. Anonymous2:39 pm, July 28, 2013

    Beautifully told. Sreedev. Hope keeps us going:)

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  8. Anamika 11:20 am, August 03, 2013

    your posts are mostly short and yet beautifully written that i am tempted to go through the rest of them.

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  9. Noopur4:15 pm, November 28, 2013

    Beautiful story indeed!!

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  10. Reubenna Dutta11:27 am, January 08, 2014

    Very sweet :-)

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  11. dipali12:56 pm, January 08, 2014

    really ice story...very well written :)

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  12. Benella Cox2:21 pm, January 08, 2014

    Nice story

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  13. Maniparna5:12 pm, January 08, 2014

    Beautifully penned down !

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  14. Unknown6:50 pm, January 08, 2014

    Beautiful.

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  15. Rat11:08 pm, January 08, 2014

    very nice. touching story. well written as usual...

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  16. hindustanisakhisaheli11:56 pm, January 08, 2014

    nyc!!

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  17. Nevin6:19 am, January 09, 2014

    Cool! A good story in few words!

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  18. Unknown9:25 am, January 09, 2014

    smart and brief

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  19. அன்புடன் சீசன்ஸ்7:50 am, January 10, 2014

    Good post

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